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mary rosenblum

Hello all.

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Welcome to our Friday After Hours forum

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I figured chapters was a good topic for tonight, considering how many new novel students we have...

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and a lot of what makes a chapter work applies to the short story scene, too. :-)

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I hope you're all enjoying spring sunshine. We're having a very unseasonable amount of sun, here in the Northwest.

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This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

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Chapters drive everybody crazy.

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When I finally decided that I really had to quit writing JUST short stories and tackle a novel...

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they drove ME crazy.

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Nowhere could I find any instruction manual. How long? How many? What makes a chapter a chapter?

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I was a very new writer and pretty insecure and I wanted someone to give me some concrete answers.

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Well...if wishes were horses...

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Chapters are merely convenient breaks that are named or numbered to make them easy to find...

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when your mom finds your face down book on the sofa and closes it.

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Instead of having to find your place in 380 pages of unbroken print, you only have to find chapter three and hunt through those...

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5 or 10 or 20 pages for your lost place.

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They give readers potty breaks and sandwich and cigarette breaks.

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And they make it easy to shift POV or time or place.

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They're pretty much whatever you want them to be in terms of length.

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They can be five pages long and you can have 70 chapters in your book.

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They can be one line long.

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They can be 60 pages long (although your readers may get restless, especially if they are drinking a supersize Coke while reading).

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I have never had an editor ask me to change chapter length, although I have heard editors say on panels...

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that they prefer this or that length. It does not seem to be a 'sale or no sale' issue.

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But it's not a matter of simply taking a magic marker, dividing your page count by say, ten, and marking Chapter One, Chapter Two, and so on at the start of each section.

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

andi

i read one book they skipped chapter 13 because one of the characters thought 13 was bad luck

mary rosenblum

I could see an author doing that. :-) You can make chapters do all kinds of odd things...

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just for effect.

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Whatever your editor will let you get away with.

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But artistic effects aside, chapters do have a structure, and that structure does help keep readers engaged with your novel.

speckledorf

As new writers, I think we want those concrete answers though. About scenes, chapters, plots, number of subplots and even why my story was rejected. But aren't most of these subjective as to what works for the story?

mary rosenblum

Mostly. Chapter length will have to do more with you and how you write. Each of us has a 'natural scene length'...

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that will tend to pace our chapters.

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You'll simply find that most of the time, your scenes will tend to be of a similar length.

tory

I tend to use chap. breaks when there is a long skip of time (days or weeks). Other than that, can you talk about the advisability of making each chap. end with a cliff-hanger-type scene. Feels manipulative to me, but...?

mary rosenblum

Yeah, if every chapter ends with a cliffhanger it feels contrived very quickly. :-)

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But chapters do have a dramatic arc, just as stories do. Think of them as mini short stories...

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but without a story's closure.

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Generally a chapter starts at a low point, rises to a small dramatic peak, then transitions to the next chapter.

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That might be a highly dramatic transition (a cliffhanger), a shift in time/place/POV, or just a transition.

robastor

I find swtiching between sets of characters make for good chapters.

mary rosenblum

Yes, but beware of switching POV with EVERY chapter, rob. You need to give your readers time to bond with your POV characters. If...

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we only get so many pages in this POV and then jump out of it, you may prevent your readers...

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from caring about any of your characters at all.

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Often you need to let your reader hang with this character for two or three chapters before you bounce out of his/ her pov again.

geezer

Would that hold for very long chapters too? 23 pages

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You're probably going to want to stick with that POV for more than one chapter at times, geeze.e

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I got a question from someone who couldn't be here tonight.

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Yes, just what does make up a chapter? We've been writing 3k for our BIP assignments, is a chapter more or less the same thing...a scene/short story within a single chapter following the same building blocks which will escalate towards a chapter by chapter climax? And can the climax be something as minimal as, say, a verbal fight?

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Yes, that's pretty much it.

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It's a single scene or maybe two very short scenes with a dramatic arc. Each...

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chapter takes you one step closer to the climax somehow.

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It is a good idea, even if you are in a subplot, to make some connection to your main plot in every chapter.

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I have read books where the author had several very strong subplots and forgot to touch base..

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with the main plot. After awhile, the main plot faded into the subplots and it became hard to recall what the main story was about.

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you

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It's a good idea to make sure that at least one character does or says something to remind your readers...

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of what the main thrust of this story is, in ever chapter.

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And you don't need a huge dramatic peak...save that for your climax.

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It might be nothing more than two characters having a short, sharp argument.

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A piece of information critical to the main plot is revealed during that argument...

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thus connecting that scene to the main plot and reminding the reader of it.

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What you do want to avoid is a chapter that simply goes on.

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By that I mean it starts with action begun in the last chapter and ends with the same action continuing on.

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Nothing interferes with it, no conflict heightens the tension...

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we simply have a flat line of action.

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Not particularly good.

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It's also a good idea...

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to change POV at the chapter break if possible.

foxx

I am reading a book with 1-2 page chapters and very long chapters broken into subshapters with spaces. No apperent reason and I find it hard to follow.

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NOt everything works. Is there a lack of continuity between chapters, foxx?

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It is a bump to the readers when they hit a chapter break.

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One thing you can do is to use a very short chapter...

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to add emphasis to a brief scene.

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Say your chapters are normally 15 - 20 pages long.

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The main character is about to do one act that is going to have profound effects on the plot.

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You can write that paragraph or so and set it off as a chapter.

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That is the equivalent of turning a spotlight on that action.

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THIS IS IMPORTANT you proclaim.

foxx

It is all the same- the chapters and subs. No continuity. I don't know enoughto explain what I mean well.

mary rosenblum

I"m not quite sure what you mean...unless there's no dramatic arc (hard to do with that short a chapter) .

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One of the thriller writers...darn, his name escapes me...is using very short chapters...

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but he's doing it to increase the sense of tension and pace -- presenting the story in brief glimpses that flash past.

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flash...flash...flash...flash...

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giving a sense of speed.

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In general, shorter chapters will make the pace seem faster, longer chapters will make the pace seem slower, but that's a very large generalization.

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Depends, too, on what you put into the chapter.

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A chapter's length alone isn't going to make your novel read fast or slow.

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And you can have more than one scene in a chapter.

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I tend to prefer to keep chapters to one scene...

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so that I don't have to add a scene break within a chapter.

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But you can have more than one scene in a chapter.

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I've found that it's a good idea to end a chapter with something that will clearly continue.

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Not only will it make it easier for you when you're writing it...you'll be motivated to keep going...

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but it does the same thing for the reader...motivates them to keep reading.

wolf122

Would you suggest using scene breaks within a chapter to switch viewpoints back and forth, as a good way to create 'speed' in a chapter?

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I wouldn't wolf. It's less likely to create speed than to create a choppy and fragmented chapter that's hard to follow.

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YOu have a big break between chapters. Adding scene breaks is often not the best choice.

tory

Mary, scene changes within a chapter--is that when we leave extra lines, or should we put asterisk(s) in a blank line? Not sure if one signals POV shift or not.

mary rosenblum

Any time you do a scene change: time/place/or POV, you leave a blank line. The asterisk * tells the editor that you MEANT to leave the blank line.

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You'd be amazed how often that blank line falls at the bottom of the page.

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you

charie'

How many scene breaks in a chapter are too many?

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Well, Charie, I really try not to use any scene breaks in a chapter.

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If my character is going to shift to another place or even another time, I'll do a verbal transition rather than an abrupt break.

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I feel that you get a smoother, tighter flow if you keep abrupt scene breaks out of your chapters.

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Break AT the chapter end.

tory

Mary, when you say end a chapter with something that will clearly ocntinue...you mean a conversation, a battle, a lunch, etc? Break chapter mid-action?

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Not necessarily something like that, tory, but perhaps start a chain of actions that will end in the next chapter.

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Marianne decides to go to the store. She grabs her car keys and calls the kids.

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In the next chapter, we might open with Marianne parking in front of the Stop N Shop.

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One temptation is to end the chapter with everybody going to bed.

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That sort of stops things solidly.

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I pay a lot of attention to the pace of the novel and the flow of the story...

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and you have a much smoother flow if actions begin before the chapter end and end in the next chapter.

andi

what about a chapter ending when a car driver is pushed off the road and blacks out the next chapter starts when she wakes up

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That's a perfectly good one.

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We want to know if she came out okay!

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That's a very dramatic end that propells the reader into the next chapter.

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And...here's a trick...if you want to leave one character stuck in a particular situation...

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and pick him up later...

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you can end the chapter with that character in the static situation...sitting in jail or locked up in her bedroom or what have you...

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and readers will mentally 'see' that character in that situation until you bring readers back to him/her.

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So it creates a sense of time passing for that character.

tory

I get it about breaking during a sequence, and have done that. (Whew. Somehing right1) If you are skipping a long period of time--say summer to Thanksgiving is the "bad" chapter break wrapping up some activity okay, or better to have chap. end with MC thinking about or making plans for TG, then break and go to TG?

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You'd probably be better off letting the MC notice the Thanksgiving stuff as she gets the Halloween decorations out of the cupboard and ...

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think about that trip she's going to make as she gets ready to carve the pumpkin.

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If you then start the next chapter with her arriving in a sleet storm with the...

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required pumpkin pie on the back seat...we know right where/when we are.

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Hmmm..I did not mean to put pumpkins in both those scenes, LOL.

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I probably wouldn't do that...you might confuse a few sloppy readers.

tory

Clever the way the pumpkin made the transition, too. You're good, Mary1

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More like not paying attention, Tory. LOL

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you

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The key always, is keep the reader and the story moving forward.

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Now if you shift dramatically at your chapter break...

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you go to another time, another place, another POV...

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remember that you need to answer those key questions in the first paragraph: what/where/when?

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Find some way to show the readers where we are, whose POV we're in, and how this time relates to the time of the previous scene.

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Is it later, much later, a flashback?

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Let's use our Halloween to Thanskgiving transition.

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Our POV has gone from city apartment to suburban home in nearby Ohio.

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Kerry pulled up in front of the old white farmhouse just as the sleet started falling in earnest. Ohio was ugly in November. Frozen stalks of...

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brussels sprouts rattled in Mom's garden out back and the bare trees seemed to claw the sky. Shielding the required pumpkin pie...

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she bolted for the front porch.

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Kerry/Ohio/Thanksgiving

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Last we saw her she was in Pennsylvania and it was October.

beryl

RE: What if the action is building and some mundane actions (getting dressed etc) must take place...would that justify * break?

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You're better off transitioning through 'em, beryl.

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Let's say you have to get your character showered, dressed, and off to the office and the next plot event.

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Darin showered and dressed in record time, grabbed a coffee from the corner kiosk and caught the 7:45 bus, praying he'd get there before Jenna.

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Or... The afternoon crawled by and Darin tried desperately not to keep glancing at the clock. He was out the door as the clock struck six and made it home in record time.

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That takes care of your entire afternoon and gets him home in one sentence.

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Using that skipped line is always a bump to the reader.

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Think about those speed bumps you drive over.

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Like that

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This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. We're talking about chapters tonight. I've published seven novels (number eight will be out next year) , more than 60 short stories, and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you

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One thing I see a lot in novel chapters written by novice writers...

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are chapters with no dramatic arc.

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The characters simply go from here to there.

beryl

Perfect, thanks Mary I just looked at my novel and could see how well it would work

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Good, beryl. You can get rid of a lot of unnecessary and boring actions with a few transitions like that.

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I really work on pace and I snip out any action that doesn't advance the plot

charie'

Flashbacks can reveal important info, how do you keep them from taking focus from your main plotline?

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Keep them small, charie.

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When I get lost is when I've maybe had a chapter or two to get to know the POV and suddenly we drop into three chapters of vivid flashback. By the end of the three chapters...

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I've forgotten the original world, I'm totally invested in this world, and when I get yanked back to the...

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'here and now' of the novel, I feel cheated.

charie'

Can it make the chapter choppy with too many changes of POV?

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Yes. I really would not change POV within the chapter.

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You're much better off changing POV at the chapter breaks.

forest elf

One way I learned to tell if it has too much unnecessary stuff is try to write a synopsis on it. If you have nothing interesting in the synopsis, then you probably have too much boring or unnecessary stuff.

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That's a good point, elf.

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It's a very useful execise, by the way, to write a synopsis for each chapter of your novel.

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It will sure show you which ones belong.

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Remember...chapters really need to conform to the Rule of Three:

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Each one should: Advance the plot.

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Deepen the characterization

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Enrich the setting.

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(Remember this from Clarion, Charie?)

charie'

Does a flashback constitute change of POV?

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Not unless it IS a change of POV :-0

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If you're in Carolyn's POV and she falls into a flashback about a dog attack when she was a kid...

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you're in Carolyn's POV in both scenes.

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It's a small change in that one Carolyn is an adult and one is a child from the past.

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But it's essentially the same POV

info

I have a question regarding the end of chapter accident/next chapter mc is waking up. If you have a scene that takes place at the begining of novel or chapter that starts with an accident and the next scene is where that person is waking up, you wouldn't start the next chapter after a three page scene, would you? Seems to me that I would want to transition the two and continue on with the chapter.

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Yeah, you'd have to see where it fit, info.

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If she has an accident and wakes up fifteen minutes later and you're on page three of the chapter...

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you'd just do a scene break. Skip a line.

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Nothing is always or never.

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While scene breaks within a chapter can make them bumpy, sometimes...as with this example...you need to use them.

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If she hits that tree at the end of the chapter...then you can start the next chapter with her waking up.

geezer

I'm depressed. I worked so hard to streamline may "chase" scene. Give it punch. The critique group says it is too fast. Slow it down. Agh!

mary rosenblum

Well, everybody see saws from one side of that fence rail to the other...or your group might not be giving you good advice. YOu have to decide

lavinia

would you define a scene please, lavinia

mary rosenblum

Sure lavinia...good question, too!

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A scene is a sequence of unbroken action with a single POV character.

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It can cover an hour, a minute, a day...as long as we follow this character through his or her actions, it's a scene.

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IF we suddenly shift to the next day...that's a new scene.

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If we suddenly shift to a new POV...that's a scene

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If we suddenly shift to a different place...that's a scene.

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A chapter can be one scene (most of mine are)...

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or you can use more than one scene.

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Any last questions before we run through out Oregon hour?

info

would it still be a different scene if the mc is in transit to another place detailing thoughts/actions or would it be the same scene

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Yeah it tends to become a new scene if your MC say, goes to the office from home, even if we listen to him...

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mutter to himself the whole way there.

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Usually new people and new events make this seem different than the previous time at home.

geezer

How many lambs did you end up with?

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Nine so far, geeze. :-)

tory

What happens to your lambs, Mary? Wool?

mary rosenblum

They're suffolk, Tory. I'm afraid the boys end up on dinner tables. The ewes will go for breeding.

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Well, this been a fun Oregon hour and my dogs have their legs crossed. I need to go take them out.

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Do join us Sunday evening for our regular get together.

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No topic, just fun chat about writing.

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Have a good weekend all.

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