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Structure and First Draft 5/24/05

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Tue May 24 12:07:37 2005

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mary rosenblum

Hello, all!

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I hope you had a fine weekend.

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I certainly did. :-)

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A literary organization in Seattle, the Richard Hugo House, put on an excellent...

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'Inquiry'...a day of panels where writers and professionals in other fields come together for ...

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a synthesis on a particular issue...this time it was the future and the role of story in our future.

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They did a marvelous job. I was impressed.

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This is the Tuesday Forum with me, Mary Rosenblum, LR Web Editor, fiction and nonfiction writer and today we're talking about structure. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen, or use the ask a question icon in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! You can also type /ask in front of your question to reach me.

mary rosenblum

I wanted to talk about structure today a bit, because structure is something that comes later for most writers. :-)

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Most of us started out just writing a story...which is fine, but you end up either spending a lot of time revising so that the story actually works...

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or you write a lot of stuff that doesn't work and doesn't sell.

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And I know writers that do that....just keep throwing out story after story until they turn out one that really works...

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but it seems kind of like a lot of really good ideas going to waste to me.

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And while taking some time to think about structure does NOT mean that you are doing a detailed outline...I know that outlines do take the spontenaiety out of writing for many people...

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a bit of thought toward your structure can save you a lot of major revision.

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So what is the structure you need to think about?

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The basic structure of story is the dramatic arc.

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Whether you're writing a slice of life vignette for a literary mag or a complete story with conflict and resolution...

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your story will generally rise to a peak of dramatic tension, either a large one or a small one, and then drop off to the end.

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While I do work out the plot of a novel length work in more detail, mainly because I HATE writing first drafts, and prefer to do mine as a chapter summary...

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I don't do that with short stories.

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But what I do when I sit down to create a short story is to decide on my characters...

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decide whose story this is, then decide what the conflict is, and from that, what the climax will be, and how things will be resolved, if they are.

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That's a grand total of four points: character, conflict, climax, resolution.

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Often that is ALL I decide on and everything else gets maid up as I go along...I'm working on a 10,000 novella for an anthology right now that is a fun exploration because I started with ONLY those points and they were pretty vague...

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so I've been evolving the story as I go. BUT...because I had those four anchor points, I won't end up having to go back and rewrite huge portions of the story because a change in one of those points made everything else stop working.

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I also got a commission while in Seattle this weekend to create a YA story involving virtual reality to be used as the anchor for a middle school summer program to teach science and society.

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There, I had more specific goals, so when I roughed out my structure points for my story, I spent more time and creative energy and added more detail to my four points.

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There, I had an agenda, and I didn't want to stray too far from what I intended.

neo

"four points of what?"

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Came in late, Neo?

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The four points I mentioned...the basic structural points for fiction...

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the character, the conflict, the climax, the resolution.

iron_will

First person, second person, third...can you explain?

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Sure, Iron.

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That is voice....how you are telling the story.

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In first person, the story is told BY the main character...using "I" as the pronoun.

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I woke up on Tuesday to thunder and hail. Great way to begin a new life.

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That's first person.

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Third uses the character's name...we are watching the character act and speak, the MC is not telling the story.

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Jared woke up on Tuesday to thunder and hail. Great way to begin a new life, he thought as he crawled out of bed.

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Second person is rarely used: You is the pronoun. Readers are pretty resistant to being told what to do!

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You wake to thunder and hail Tuesday morning. Great way to begin a new life you think as you crawl out of bed.

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Occasionally someone does a good second person story, but it is TOUGH to pull off.

neo

What is a structure point? Isn't structure the action, rising and falling?

mary rosenblum

Once again, neo, we're dealing with a vocabulary that isn't standardized. 'Stucture' has no absolute meaning...everyone who teaches writing will use it in a slightly different manner with a slightly different meaning.

mary rosenblum

This is the Tuesday Forum with me, Mary Rosenblum, LR Web Editor, fiction and nonfiction writer and today we're talking about structure. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen, or use the ask a question icon in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! You can also type /ask in front of your question to reach me.

pook

Mary, when you working on a low word count, like assignment 6, and the story is longer than that, how do you use the four points to determine what to cut?

mary rosenblum

good question, pook...because this is why it's in your best interests to think about the structure of your story. :-)

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As I've said many times before, unless you have simply used too many words and the story needs tightening...

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shortening a story is a matter of changing the plot rather than simply removing words.

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Every story has a natural length and if your story is too long for a particular word count, change the story itself.

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If you simply remove words, you end up with a superficial summary with little real power.

neo

Could you define "structure" as the term is being used here, please?

mary rosenblum

Neo, I just did. Twice. Sigh.

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One more time. :-)

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What I am talking about are the basic points that create the structure of the story:

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The main character. The conflict. The climax point. The resolution.

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These are the main points that give the dramatic arc of your story its shape.

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And, to get back to pook's question...

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If your story is simply too long, take a look at your conflict and climax....

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is there a way to focus in on that conflict, to convey it to the reader in a small scale?

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For example, if the conflict is between a father and son...Dad has to finally realize his son is an adult...

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that's a good conflict. Maybe you have set the story on a weekend fishing trip and the climax comes as they get into an accident...

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and son really takes control of the situation.

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But the story is WAY too long with the set up, details of the weekend, etc.

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You could use the same MC, conflict, climax and resolution...

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but think about setting up a sitaution that allows for less length...

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perhaps your characters begin on the third day of that trip in the boat, and you let the readers...

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see the problem in the opening scene as they land a fish and dad belittles son...

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and you get quickly to the accident and the son's rescue.

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You have a shorter story.

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That's the value of identifying those main points of your story...

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You can adjust what comes in between to make the story longer or shorter.

pook

I shortened it by removing some characters and limiting content. Can I summarize in the story to move along to climax and resolution?

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Well, summarizing is one way to get readers through a boring scene, but remember that summarizing doesn't really engage readers...

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you're essentially telling 'em what happened.

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And that's why it's a good idea to actually change the story in order to shorten it so that you don't have to summarize...

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but can really engage the reader with fewer events.

writeaway

Building blocks.

mary rosenblum

The 'structure points'? Perhaps more 'lighthouses' on that sea of a story. :-)

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Think of them as places you want to end up in your story...

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and then you can decide just what route to take in between to get there.

iron_will

suggestion: maybe just condense and leave as is

mary rosenblum

Again, iron, condensing is similar to summarizing.

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Think about what make a story memorable for your reader.

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It's not the idea...it's the reality of the story...the sense that we lived that moment and it really happened.

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And in order to feel that the moment is real, you need to allow the reader to be involved in that scene, to see the details, process events for themselves...

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and that just doesn't happen if you skim over events.

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It generally reads fine to YOU the author, because you know all the background, so all you need is a quick skim...

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but that's not true for your reader who is new to this place, time, and people.

speckledorf

In a novel...how do we deal with dramatic arc and spread it over such a long distance?

mary rosenblum

Well, there, you're going to have the same four basics: your main characaters, the central conflicts, your climax and your resolution.

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That's really all you need, although you can begin to place some of your strong climax points in the story as you work out your plot.

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But if exploration is most of the fun of writing for you, figure out those four points and leave the rest to happen as they will if you want.

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Where a lot of novice writers get bogged down in their first novel attempt or so is that they forge again from page one...

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get themselves into the middle of the novel...which is something akin to the Sahara, actually....and get bogged down.

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They have run out of momentum, can't think of anything cool and new to inspire them....and they just stop working on the novel.

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In novel form especially, knowing ahead of time what your climax will be can really save you.

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You have that cool scene to look forward to, and when you're bogged down in sand in your middle-Sahara, most people find it easier...

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to figure out a way to get THERE, to a specific scene, than to simply get to a vague and unrealized 'end'.

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I love writing the climax scene. That' s dessert for me. :-) So it's always waiting out there, beckoning, when I'm in one of the many 'oh, this is just too much work' moods! :-)

roe

I don't plot out my novel beforehand chapter by chapter. Just the way I work. but I do jot down ideas and I know where I'm going and how I want to resolve the situation. My problem is how to put the chapters in later. I'm trying to put them in where they make the most sense (new scene etc) any advice?

mary rosenblum

Relax, roe, and put them in where YOU think they belong. Chaptering is frustratingly fluid...there are no rules...

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although the younger the reader the shorter the chapters do tend to be.

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Generally a good chapter end is one where you have hit a brief low, but a looming event tempts the reader onward.

mary rosenblum

This is the Tuesday Forum with me, Mary Rosenblum, LR Web Editor, fiction and nonfiction writer and today we're talking about structure. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen, or use the ask a question icon in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! You can also type /ask in front of your question to reach me.

speckledorf

So we give each chapter a bit of the arc so to speak?

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Ideally, yes. Pacing is a subtle art, but if you build rising tension into each chapter, it tends to engage the reader. Think of a long roller coaster...

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which is more fun? Lots of smaller hills and downhill plunges leading to the REALLY big drop? Or one long interminable hill and one drop?

writeaway

Is it possible to have more than one dramatic arc in a novel or is it best to keep it to one?

mary rosenblum

OH, goodness, write, lots of dramatic arcs work very well. :-) Novels are complex.

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You can have a main internal plot, a main external plot, and a host of strong subplots.

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It simply depends on how large your story is and how many strong characters you have.

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Some novels are fairly simple, with a main external and internal plot and only a couple of subplots...they often feature a single POV character.

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Others are very complex with three or more main characters and a number of strong dramatic arcs converging on the final climax.

roe

I'm working on a mystery which involves a serial killer. He leaves a nursery rhyme with each victim. I'm thinking of adding part of the nursery rhyme at the beginning of each chapter that has a killing, Is this the right way or should I use a page in between each chapter for this. Example: Georgie Porgie etc. Well, Georgie old boy, you've kissed your last girl- now it's time to die. I was thinking of doing it before the Chapter #

mary rosenblum

You can do it any way that pleases you, roe. Your editor will decide on how it will work best in the book design.

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You can arugue it out then. :-)

mary rosenblum

This is the Tuesday Forum with me, Mary Rosenblum, LR Web Editor, fiction and nonfiction writer and today we're talking about structure. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen, or use the ask a question icon in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! You can also type /ask in front of your question to reach me.

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The reason I suggest deciding on those four points for yourself before you start a story is that it allows you to do a lot of changing as you write...

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and still end up with a solid dramatic arc and coherent story.

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There is a big difference between revising and rewriting.

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If you can avoid rewriting you'll save yourself a lot of time, plus it's hard to hide the seams in a rewritten story. :-)

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It's also a way to begin to learn flexibility...something almost no novice writer possesses naturally.

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What I mean by that, is that when we start out, we tend to envision our story and it instantly solidifies to stone.

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We can polish, carve in a few more details, but we can't CHANGE it...we can't see beyond THIS shape.

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And believe me, the more flexible you become as a writer, the more you can do with every idea that occurs to you.

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At that point, your story is plastic, no longer stone. You can twist it, stretchi it, ball it into a lump and see which shape seems to work best.

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Once you have your basic points decided on, play with everything that comes in between. See what makes you go 'wow'!

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To get a very different story, change one of your points...see how that affects everything else.

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For example, because I had to get this YA story written in a single week, I really had to hop to it on the plotting end.

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So I decided on the climax and resolution that would fit the teaching point I was asked to create...

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then I tried different characters to see what they did to the story...

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I tried different conflicts...I tried different settings...

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until I found a combination that worked in terms of length and interest and got me to the resolution and teaching point I needed.

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If I had started with my original idea, I'd be done with the first draft right now, yes, but realizing that this is not as strong a story as I wanted.

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I'll be done with the first draft this afternoon, instead, and it's a much stronger story.

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Mostly, what I'm trying to do here, is to get you all to experiment with story BEFORE you write it down.

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Which is what the 'summary' assignments in the LR course are intended to do. :-)

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And if you decide on the main points that you want to include...your conflict, your climax, your resolution, your character...or any combination of one or more of those...

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you have something of a 'safety line'. You have anchored this story, now you can go experiment and you are still anchored in this story.

gskearney

It sounds kind of like traveling to me. You need to know where you're going, and then you can pick the best route and the right vehicle. --gk

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Good analogy, Gary. :-)

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A road map of sorts...you know you want to get to San Francisco...

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but there are a number of routes you can take.

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Stories are really not fragile crystals that must be handled with care lest they shatter...

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they are a cool let of Legos that you can assemble in many different ways.

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And often, the way you think the story will work best isn't. But unless you play with other options, you won't know what's best.

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AND...it's a great way to learn to plot on demand, which is a reality when you're a pro.

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You get asked to write quite often...

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I have two stories in progress right now that were requested.

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It wasn't a matter of 'do I have something to fit this market' it was a matter of 'write this for me will you?"

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It's invaluable when new market opens up...say an anthology of circus stories, or dog stories...

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and you don't have one.

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This is the Tuesday Forum with me, Mary Rosenblum, LR Web Editor, fiction and nonfiction writer and today we're talking about structure. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen, or use the ask a question icon in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! You can also type /ask in front of your question to reach me.

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Let's take our circus example...

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start with a charcter...what would be fun to work with?

speckledorf

The guy who cleans up after the animals.

geezer

A clown

mary rosenblum

both good! I was thinking both of those, actually...a roustabout or a clown!

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They're not the expected MC like the lion tamer. :-)

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This is somebody low on the 'pecking order' in the circus hierarchy...especially the roustabout.

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So let's give him a conflict.

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Maybe he gets bullied by one of the stars? The lion tamer?

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The trapeze star?

speckledorf

How about smuggling in something through animal feed?

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YOu mean like drugs?

speckledorf

Not drugs...how about jewels?

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Ha, that's good.

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So we have point one: Our animal cleanup guy.

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Conflict...he needs to deal with the bully, the lion tamer (and of course we can toss in a love interest here, too, maybe with the trapeze girl)...

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We need point three..the climax. Our guy has the jewel smuggling to discover to fix the bully or he can face off personally or both or other options?

geezer

The clown's a girl

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That works, and by putting her in for our point one, the story is instantly different. We now have two stories. :-)

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Our climax for both could be an encounter with the bully where the MC wins...might be in the animal tent...

speckledorf

Clown is girl pretending to be man...adds a subplot with a nice twist/

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again, a nice substitute on point one, and again we have a new story.

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The climax is a face off with the lion tamer and the resolution is that the lion tamer's smuggling is exposed.

writeaway

she might be working under cover... following the jewels

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Again, by changing that one point, we have again altered the structure.

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oops...altered the story.

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In every case, we'll have the same dramatic arc roughly...

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MC and bully clash (character and conflict)...

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climax is a face off with animal/ danger to MC (climax)...

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resolution is that smuggling is revealed. (resolution)

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You can change details of any of these points and change the story to a greater or lesser degree.

geezer

The clown is an international jewel thief adn while they are squaring off, she gets the jewels

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That would work, too.

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Once you find your four general points, you can start trying different ideas..

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different characters, different ways the climax could play out...

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different resolutins.

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Our MC might run off with the jewels...she is a competitor...

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or she is down on her luck and this will fix her life.

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Or she is a cop, or she turns him in and in the process meets the love interest detective...

diane2

how much character development should you do before writing?

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I do a LOT Diane...

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if my character is not fully formed for me when I start writing...

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then that character tends to do what the plot demands and becomes a plot puppet rather than a realistic character.

writermom

I have to change the age of two of my mc's from 15 to 18 where do I begin to do this

mary rosenblum

Do you mean they have to age, write?

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Or you just want older characters from page one?

writermom

older from page one

mary rosenblum

Well, start thinking about the difference in a kid who is 18 from your 15 year old.

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Interest in the opposite sex is different, priveleges are different as are responsiblities...less control by Mom and Dad, more self reliance...

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This will vary according to the actual character you have created...

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but think about the 15 year olds you know and the 18 year olds and what they are like.

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It's not going to be as big a difference as going from 10 to 18 but there will be a difference.

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Well, this has been a fun Oregon Hour. :-)

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I'd better go finish my YA story. Do join us for our casual chat tomorrow...

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same time same place, only we just get together to talk about whatever.

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Next time you're starting a story, try coming up with those four basic points before you begin...

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and then try changing them...see what you get.

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I'll post the transcript in the usual place: writing craft: forum transcripts.

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Have a good day, all!

writeaway

Thanks, Mary. You helped me with a problem I'm having with amy story.

mary rosenblum

Oh, good! Glad it helped, write!

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Have a good day, all!

 

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